ext_22800 ([identity profile] scribeoflight.livejournal.com) wrote in [personal profile] coalescent 2005-09-15 09:49 pm (UTC)

'He sings of the vast void and of seeds, of shatterings and scatterings and gatherings, of seeds of earth and air and sea and flickerings of flecks, the flash, the flux of fire' (242)

I will read further, but isn't this rather purple? It feels hugely over-written from where I'm sitting: "flickerings... flecks... flash... flux... fire..." (?!?!); "shatterings and scatterings" (?!?!?!?).

It just feels tricksy.
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